【王老師寫給你看】用 GRE 分析寫作練邏輯思維、學寫，留學時台灣學生別再當美國學生的後援會啦！

除了「時間不夠」之外，準備 GRE 分析寫作的台灣考生最常碰到的致命傷就是寫了半天「沒有切題、討論到該討論的東西」。而這也是不管原本英文程度如何的學生、還是學霸指數多少的學生，都會遇到的狀況。

雖說很多考生都聽過「主題句」很重要(主題句 = 扣題立場＋原因) ，但「實際操作」跟「頭腦裡知道」往往有很大的差距，大概 5 個學生裡有4 個就會偏題。

除此之外，我們的母語中文表達想法時的 vagueness ，也很常讓台灣考生偏題或沒掌握好題目的 scope 。

(e.g. 題目問高等教育對職涯發展的影響，結果學生一直在討論高等教育或是教育 )。

✔︎ 假設今天我們拿到了這個高頻題：
To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

某學生在第二段寫了這樣的主題句:
First of all, the most important characteristics of a society can be defined in a variety of ways.

寫完後，我問了學生：
• 你覺得你這樣有回答到問題嗎？
• 你是如何分析這個題幹 (prompt) 的呢？
• 為什麼一開始就把 "understand" 和 "must study" 這兩個重要的概念給丟掉了了呢？

學生後來又加了一句話，變成 (原文直接呈現，無做調整)
First of all, the most important characteristic of a society can be defined in a variety of ways. Based on the reason, we may not rule out the possibility that the most attracting characteristic in one's heart is not existed in the major city.

• 加了第二句話後，我們又看到了至少4個問題：

(1) important characteristics 怎麼被過度成 attracting characteristics 了呢？(一字代換即離題)
(2) 補 in one's heart 的用意是什麼呢？
(3) 核心概念的 "of a society" 在第二句話消失了
(4) is not existed 為嚴重會導致扣分的文法錯誤（因文章有5處出現一樣的錯誤)。

啊，英文好難啊，你一定這樣想。怎麼會才寫兩句話，就那麼多問題呢？主因來自於大家忽略了好的學術寫作學習，需要系統性的訓練、和練習。很多考生都錯以為範文看一看、點子想一想就可以上場了。

➠ 依照著學生的想法，我試寫了一段：

I partially agree with the statement, as we can certainly gain a deeper understanding of some defining features of a society by studying its major cities, where we can easily observe the socio-cultural events, beliefs, and phenomena that collectively contribute to the construction of the "identity" of a society. However, it should be noted that some of these features that help define a society can ONLY be observed in small towns, as opposed to major cities. Therefore, if we wish to thoroughly--rather than partially--understand the most important characteristics of a society, we must study both big cities and small towns. For instance, ....

在我的改寫中你可以注意到，我沒有一句話會脫離「理解」的這個概念，我也盡可能的讓「社會」這個概念不離開我的寫作 (e.g. socio-cultural events, beliefs, and phenomena; some of these features that help define a society)。

政治、經濟算社會嗎？當然也算。但在時間有限的狀況下，直接寫 social-cultural 是最方便的處理方式。

另外你也可以注意到，我是部分同意了本文。我同意要理解一個社會最重要的核心特色，我們一定要研究大城市。但我在第三句話後面塞了 "thoroughly--rather than partially" 這樣的表達，去闡述如果要「夠全面的了解」只研究大城市不夠。

再回到學生最最一開始的版本：First of all, the most important characteristic of a society can be defined in a variety of ways. 你覺得好嗎？

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【講師介紹】
王梓沅 (GRE V166 / 穩定 AW 5.5, PR 98、TOEFL 117、IELTS 滿分)
哥倫比亞大學應用語言學碩士
賓州大學 (UPenn) 社會語言學碩士
創勝文教共同創辦人、GRE 課程負責人
《GRE 學霸字彙》作者 (2019 眾文圖書出版)

【🎫The science & technology field card holder： Employment Gold Card makes Taiwan more competitive in attracting talent ✨ – Colum Brolly】

📣To let more foreigners know about the benefits of the employment gold card policy, NDC specially invited the cardholders in different fields to share their experience of applying for employment gold cards and the feeling of working and living in Taiwan. We will upload a new video every Monday and Friday of this month. Now let's listen to the fifth sharer, the science & technology field card holder – Colum Brolly from Ireland.

📍中文字幕版影片在這↓ Chinese subtitle video is here↓
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xFYMm6VWkaI

📍英文字幕版影片在這↓ English subtitle video is here↓
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sFSMrMZOaJI

瞭解更多就業金卡政策↓ Learn more about employment gold card↓
https://foreigntalentact.ndc.gov.tw/en/Default.aspx

📣為了讓更多外國人瞭解就業金卡政策的好處，國發會特別邀請了不同領域的持卡人現身說法，分享他們申請就業金卡的經驗以及來臺灣工作及生活的感想，我們會在這個月的每周一及周五在FB上傳一支新的影片，現在就讓我們聽聽第五位，愛爾蘭籍科技領域持卡人Colum Brolly怎麼說吧！

The most memorable part of my trip in Uzbekistan: seeing the spectacular of the Timur Empire; first-time getting sick while travel; unexpectedly attracting Uzbek teenagers who wanted to make Japanese friends; being asked to take photos together like a superstar... There were too many stories in Samarkand, which is why it took me 2 weeks to produce this post.

Again, written primarily in Mandarin, but each section has a brief English summary. The post has many words, but also many photos -- for those who like photos than words, I'm convinced that you'd enjoy this post :D

在烏茲別克境內最高潮迭起的一段——見識帖木兒帝國的輝煌、第一次在旅行路上臥病在床、被想認識日本朋友的烏茲別克青少年纏上、像巨星一樣被當地人要求合影⋯⋯。撒馬爾罕有太多故事，害我寫了兩個禮拜才把這篇生出來XD

本篇一樣中文為主，每個段落有簡單的英文摘要，字數很多不過圖也很多，相信可以滿足大家想看圖勝於想要看文字的渴望的 :D

http://blog.jeromeyang.com/2018/09/blog-post_16.html